I think it is a great start. All you really need to polish it off is an opening with mission, some transitional dialogue and an good closing. You could also add a opening regarding that the video is presented by your website and then close by referencing your website ate the end. Here are some suggestions...
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"Hi I'm Mel from Movieposter Collectors .com - The foremost blah, blah. Our/my mission is to inform collectors new and old about the hobby of movie poster collecting. This is the first video in a series of videos dealing with authentication. For a newb or newbie as they are referred to, it is often a scary place, the world of movie poster collecting, because it is often frustrating and difficult to be confident that the poster being bought is authentic and original..."
"Today I will be providing an overview on determining the authenticity of a Star Wars theater used movie poster. When the film was released in 1977 there were three styles of the standard US one sheet Styles A through C. And you probably didn't know this, but one of the most famous bootlegs in the hobby is the Star Wars Style C US One Sheet. I am going to teach you how to steer clear of this poster."
There are three main tells of a bootleg and all can be determined by visual inspection. The three checks are (and I will try to make them easy to remember) 1. "Han's Gas Cloud", 2. "R2D2 Hairy Foot" and 3. "L's Hairy Shoulder"... So before I show a close up just to summarize there are three tells of the bootleg... 1. "Han's Gas Cloud", 2. "R2D2 Hairy Foot" and 3. "L's Hairy Shoulder"...
1. han
2. You may want to discuss what a "hair" is before starting on R2's foot...Now you may ask what is a "Hair"? Well a hair is a piece of dust or hair that got trapped onto the plates during print making,etc...
3. hair 2
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"So again, just remember three things 1. "Han's Gas Cloud", 2. "R2D2 Hairy Foot" and 3. "L's Hairy Shoulder"... and you'll be able to spot this bootleg from "far far away"
Thanks for joining me for this first in a series of authentication videos. Feel free to visit Movie Poster Collectors.com for additional details on this authentication and other."
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